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Finally, the bell rang and all the kids ran out of class to the playground for recess. Immediately, everyone grouped up into their friend groups and began to either play on the monkey bars or play basketball. All of the groups but two. Rama was the king of fourth grade and was determined to get his girlfriend back from school bully Ravana. Ravana thought he was better than everyone else because he was older, but that was only because he failed first grade twice.
Finally, the bell rang and all the kids ran out of class to the playground for recess. Immediately, everyone grouped up into their friend groups and began to either play on the monkey bars or play basketball. All of the groups but two. Rama was the king of fourth grade and was determined to get his girlfriend back from school bully Ravana. Ravana thought he was better than everyone else because he was older, but that was only because he failed first grade twice.
Rama's younger brother Lakshman was eager to win his brother's favor as well as escape his shadow. When the inevitable fight broke out, he knew he was going to have to do something big. Lakshman's moment came when Ravana's biggest baddest buddy Meghnad came his way. "Hey dummy I am going to kick your ugly butt," Lakshman called out. "No way stinky head," Meghnad replied. Now, the fight was on. Lakshman knew he was in for one heck of a fight. Rumor had it, Meghnad was in possession of the three sacred weapons- a laser pointer, a slingshot, and the stickiest of the sticky hands.
The whole school yard gathered to watch the fight ensue. Both of them circled around seizing up their opponent; waiting for the perfect moment to strike. Suddenly, Meghnad leaped forward, both hands a whirlwind of slaps and scratches. Lakshman recovered from this initial attack and did his best to get some good slaps in. For a moment, Lakshman thought he was going to be able to win but suddenly he found himself on the ground. Meghnad loomed over him winding up for a devastating crane kick. Lakshman knew he had been beaten. Suddenly, Rama stepped out of the crowd and with a mighty slap turned Meghnad into a crying baby on the ground. Addressing the crowd, Rama said, "fights over, go back to playing." Rama helped Lakshman back to his feet and they went back to their turf by the swings.
Authors Note: I based my story on the fight between Rama's brother Lakshman and Ravana's son Meghnad. I told the story as a schoolyard fight between elementary students rather than between mighty warriors. In the story the two meet on the battlefield. Lakshman is killed and then revived back to life. Rama then steps in and ends the fight by killing Meghnad. I thought it would be funny and interesting to tell such an epic and powerful battlefield as a silly playground slap fight. Despite the huge change in setting, characters, and dialogue, I actually kept the major points and plot of the original story intact.
The whole school yard gathered to watch the fight ensue. Both of them circled around seizing up their opponent; waiting for the perfect moment to strike. Suddenly, Meghnad leaped forward, both hands a whirlwind of slaps and scratches. Lakshman recovered from this initial attack and did his best to get some good slaps in. For a moment, Lakshman thought he was going to be able to win but suddenly he found himself on the ground. Meghnad loomed over him winding up for a devastating crane kick. Lakshman knew he had been beaten. Suddenly, Rama stepped out of the crowd and with a mighty slap turned Meghnad into a crying baby on the ground. Addressing the crowd, Rama said, "fights over, go back to playing." Rama helped Lakshman back to his feet and they went back to their turf by the swings.
Authors Note: I based my story on the fight between Rama's brother Lakshman and Ravana's son Meghnad. I told the story as a schoolyard fight between elementary students rather than between mighty warriors. In the story the two meet on the battlefield. Lakshman is killed and then revived back to life. Rama then steps in and ends the fight by killing Meghnad. I thought it would be funny and interesting to tell such an epic and powerful battlefield as a silly playground slap fight. Despite the huge change in setting, characters, and dialogue, I actually kept the major points and plot of the original story intact.
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The Prince Indrajit or Meghnad
F.J. Gould, The Divine Archer, http://iereadingguides.blogspot.com/2014/05/reading-guide-week-1-gould-divine-archer.html
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This story cracked me up! I loved how you transformed it into a playground fight. When you said Ravana failed first grade twice, I laughed out loud, because I can totally see him having failed and then thinking he's big and bad because he's older. I also got a chuckle out of the three mighty weapons. This was a really cute way to retell the story and you used imagery really well! I could just see the boys battling it out in the playground!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this hilarious story! I really like how you made it into something I would have seen back in the day out on the playground at recess or something. Really brought me back in the day. I thought that your way of telling the story was a really cool spin and something i wouldn't have even thought of doing which shows your creativity. Great job and keep up the good work!
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